Independent WIP

  • This is awesome! I love the concept, the idea, the composition and also your color and value choices. The character design is great - unique and charming.
    There is only one thing that I would think about, if you feel so inclined. I think the storytelling aspect is suffering a little by not showing the moment of "liberation". As is now, the viewer has to put together the cues to understand what has happened, and the role of the hero is not that clear. If you showed the hero in the moment where he is cutting the last strings, the storytelling aspect would be so much stronger.
    I know this means re-drawing, so feel free to stick with what you have - even though I feel it is a pity not to exploit this great idea to the max!

  • I like the new poses, though the mouse still seems a bit stiff, even for a puppet.
    @smceccarelli has a point about the story, but I feel that could be the illustration before this one: the cutting of the strings, and then the escape (this illustration). I will say that the hero does need to be made more clear in this version, perhaps by putting the scissors in front of him, or maybe off to the right.

  • SVS OG

    @tombarrettillo you are right. I moved the scissors, and stuck them into our hero's belt.
    @smceccarelli you have a good point. Maybe I'll save that illustration and come back to it.

    Colors going down finally.

  • Really good storytelling and a lovely piece of art.

Log in to reply