Where am I falling short?
Matthew Oberdier last edited by
@K-Flagg your drawing is good. For the latest piece, I think the values could be improved on a little. You have a dark character on a dark background. If you desaturate your piece you might see the value problem more clearly.
Rachel Horne last edited by
@chrisaakins @K-Flagg - I agree, great advice from Lee, there's so much to be got from the critiques made to others...it can really help improve work and although it must be nice to win it's great practice working to a deadline
willicreate last edited by
@K-Flagg While I probably am not qualified to address your question, I have some thoughts...
The idea is good, but there are technical issues. Some are minor, like the cat's name tag is sitting on top of it's out stretched right paw.
It was a surprise there were several nautical-themed inns submitted. What should have been a bold idea was lost in the crowd.
The ship is well rendered, with a few perspective errors in the railing and portholes. That could have subtracted points. I’m curious to know why the lamp post is tilting at the same angle as the ship.
If there is a story behind the boat, I cannot say what the narrative is. Is it a building made to look like a ship? Is it a ship run around and converted to being an inn? There are sails, so it the boat sea-worthy?
While the choice of natural wood color is fine, it’s only fine. Have you considered give the ship a coat of paint? To add history, perhaps the stern/transom could have the ship’s name on it in its original paint, tacked on with the word “inn”?
I see there is a stand-off between characters, but the narrative isn't clear. Is the racoon there to parley, fight or is trapped?
The positioning of the enemy characters is odd. The two on the right, to whom are they snarling at? They’re not facing the raccoon. The one on the left with an open mouth, what are you telling the viewer with its arms? The one next to it seems to have turned his head to face the racoon. Why is it's body facing the cliffs?
@K-Flagg I think your character designs are really nice, there's a lot of nice expressions and gestures. Your colour choices are really good too. With the more illustrative pieces, however, I think you maybe need to work a little bit with some of the fundamentals and follow the judges' advice as much as you can, if your goal is to win the contests. Some of the contestants who win a lot are already professional illustrators or have been doing this for a long time so I wouldn't compare yourself to them and just compare yourself to you. For example, whenever I don't win or get noticed, or lose to someone in who is 44 when I'm 22, I just imagine how good I'll be when I'm that age. Hard work and dedication will always be rewarded in the end in some way or another, so keep going. I think your work is more or less there anyway, I love your character sheets !!
Hi! I can offer my perspective as a newcomer in the area of trained illustration. I am not a professional, and as a hobbyist I have been drawing mainly in a simple cartoony style, also my aim is towards comics and graphic novels. So I am a little behind still, but I am trying hard to look at what I do with a critical eye and find out where I am going (also my first try in the svs challenge, greatly acclaimed by my family, was quite invisible here!).
So, trying to get to the point, from my point of view, I don’t think the matter with your pieces is they are not “small children book illustration” as you mentioned, I think that you are on the right track for drawing comics, as your drawing and compositions and character looks fine, and the lack of succes as you perceive it on the challenge is just an indicator that you are close but that an extra layer of polish and experience is needed to get to that art level a single more professional illustration needs - the colors, values, style of rendering as discussed previously. Even if it might not be the necessary requirement for regular comic book work, I think getting that extra level of art and polish does push one to better results overall.
Τhis was actually mentioned on one of the pieces in the current critique session - that it would have done well in an array of images like in a story or a comic book - but for a showcase illustration it lacked enough wow. I think this means that to get to a better level and win in this challenge one has to be able to get an illustration to a “cover” “ or “art poster” level.
As indeed on svs much of the examples offered are children book images, maybe it would be usefull to have on the side as a study and comparison some art covers from other areas - YA, hero comics, pieces to wich you relate better..
I hope what I wrote made some sense... in my head it does
Ps. And I too think your weak point at this moment is the coloring/rendering - it’s a bit harsh... (I identify, having great pains myself with the coloring) so more work in that direction would get progress
@K-Flagg I actually think you made some great progress from the first illustration in 2020 to the last! Can you see that, I wonder?
Oh, and I noticed something about the last piece.... I realised what was bothering me about it: maybe by giving the racoon the blue lighting eyes you have lost his personality, it looks very cold... like the goblins...he is the main focus and the good guy in the piece, but he looks too distant like this to draw you on his side. Maybe this also influences people’s reaction,not just the colors?
K.Flagg last edited by
@willicreate thank you! I never noticed that about the cats name tag on the first image before haha. Where were you when that was still a WIP lol.
K.Flagg last edited by
@Oana Thank you for the wonderful advice! I will definitely use my next few pieces to really dive into less saturated colors and limited color pallets since that seems to be the most noticed problem.