Such a big difference! What a cute and charming house!

@Griffin Thank you so much for the advice, and you were absolutely right. I completely reworked it and came up with a completely different composition in the end. I did a "modern take" on why the rabbit lost the race! I posted it on the main Rabbit Road Race thread. Wow, ok I did 10, but I can definitely see how 30 would have been even better. I appreciate you taking the time to give me feedback and it's so great to be learning more and more from the forums everyday!

Thanks for sharing this with us, @akwisler!! You've got some nice line work
and depth happening on the second piece!! 🙂 And there's a charm in the first. Nice clean lines. You could truly develop that style as well.

@ajillustrates I really love this. Excellent job!

@Asyas_illos thanks Asyas!

@PenAndrew Thank you Andrew 🙂

@Kristen-Lango Thank you 😁

@Lex-Haven lovely, sweet characters. I've never seen animals for hair, so points for originality!

Yes, the first illustration is very soft, to the point where it is hard to read. Otherwise, you have chosen a great palette and have nice expression. Adding a smidge more value and a few edges will probably fix a lot of your issues with the piece. (Don't forget shadows too -- the lack of shadows, even light ones, makes the characters look like they're floating. Unless they are?)

The second illustration has more defined edges, but the edges are actually making the illustration harder to read and detracting from your character, who is supposed to be the focal point. The floor and ice cream are so saturated, with stronger values than any used in the main character.

Hope you don't mind -- I took a screenshot to show some examples of what I'm talking about, because sometimes a picture is just easier!

This is the 2nd illustration in black and white so it's easier to see the values. If the intention is to have the ice cream as the focal point, then the illustration is fine as is. But if the intention is for the girl to be the focal point, you can see that with all her lighter values, she gets lost. Because there is so much contrast in the ice cream and background, those elements compete for attention and overpower the girl.
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Here is a visual suggestion of just one way to adjust those values:
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In this example, I lightened the ice cream and the entire background. I also changed the tile color from black to a light gray blue. The girl is darkened considerably and she was given the most saturated colors to help her stand out. The illustration is also cropped to draw more attention to the girl and place her a little off center, which adds interest.

There are lots of ways you can go with this illustration. This is just one example. And it's just a suggestion -- this is your art and you can do whatever you want with it!

Wow, you've given yourself quite the challenge: finding a new style in just a few months! It's great that you're diving into SCBWI and are serious about getting your portfolio ready for the summer conference. As you're doing so, here are a few things to think about:

Make sure your style is consistent. There are a few inconsistencies between these two illustrations, aside from the rendering. In one illustration, the characters have dots for eyes; in the other, the girl has more detailed eyes. Since this is a new style for you, I suggest picking one and sticking to it. For this particular style, I think that the dots for eyes works much better and is much cuter. It also looks like you used different brushes -- not meaning that you have to use only the same few brushes, but you might want to consider it. Again, since this is a new style that you're figuring out, finding some consistency will go a long way to making it look more polished.

Why are you changing your style? Is it for a change? Because you want to? Or you want to work faster? Or is it because you're afraid you won't get work with your more detailed style? If it's the latter, know that is not necessarily the case. There are a ton of children's book illustrators with a more realistic, detailed style--rendering with oils, acrylics, watercolor, digital, and more--and they're consistently getting work. There isn't one "children's book style". You can even work in more than one style. For example, you may want to check out these illustrators: Kadir Nelson, Hannah Harrison, Brian Lies, Matt Myers, Aaron Becker (he has more than one style), Eric Rohmann, Adam Rex (also works in more than one style), Daniel Kirk, David Wiesner, Jerry Pinkney, Erin E. Stead, Jonathan Voss, Christopher Denise, the Fan Brothers, Jason Chin, Floyd Cooper ... there's more but this will get you started. 😉

Check out illustrators whose style is similar to your new style. Not to copy them, but to get some inspiration and to see what's already out there. What are they doing that works? What makes their art appealing? How can you incorporate that into your style? Here are some illustrators with a cute, simple style that you may want to check out: David Walker, Renata Liwska, Emily Winfield Martin, Helen Oxenbury, Charles Santoso, Shahrzad Maydani, Molly Idle, Patrice Barton, Sophie Blackall, Sydney Hanson, Vashti Harrison. And of course, there's more, but this will get you started. 😉

WOW, this turned out to be a long reply! Hope it's helpful. Looking forward to seeing more of your work and where you go with it!

Nice sketch. I am currently working on a caricature of my daughters. The interview with Tom Richmond just posted today as well from 3 Point Perspective. Gonna have to listen to that on my way to work.

I was taking pictures of these cows so that I could paint them and a farmer stopped to see what I was up to. When I showed him my camera, he said, "OK," and drove off but I could see he thought anyone who found cows worth photographing must be a little strange. Would he have thought it less or more strange that my intent was to paint them?

Anyway, playing with ink and watercolor here. I am very fond of E.H. Shepard's style (Winnie-the-Pooh).

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@HeatherB I like the improvements. You can give the baby a dark mane to set it off from the mother. The front legs, below the knee, on the baby are anatomically a bit too long, especially between the lowest joint (pastern) and the hoof. If you shortened them, you could use the black hooves to further separate the baby from the background (mother). Fun facts - Male donkeys are called jacks and females - jennies. I'm pretty sure the babies are called foals just like horses.

I feel like the top image doesn't have much of a story, but the bottom three definitely do, especially the one of the man lifting up the ocean to find a key. Even editorial work tells stories. Just in a different way from kids books. I feel like these images lean more towards editorial. But if they included children, they could be for a kid's book! Look up the book "Let's do Everything and Nothing" by Julia Kuo. It's a recently published picture book with a style very similar to these illustrations!

@HeatherB Yes- much stronger!

@notfitkid Albert do you create your work from start to finish with digital apps?

@Kristen-Lango Yeah that's something I'm noticing too. I didn't think that the softness of the soft brush was so striking!

It feels like the attention is placed on the lightening rather than the characters because the trees direct our eyes to the lightening. To balance this out you could change the direction of the trees and make the fox and bunny more animated by having them dramatically reacting to the lightening strike. It seems like they’re not reacting to the lightening at the moment. A good test would be to remove the lightening from the image and if you can tell the characters are reacting to something that isn’t there then that’s good but right now if you removed the lightening we wouldn’t be able to tell for the characters reactions that there’s something going on in that area of the illustration. Hope this helps!

@davidhohn Congratulations on your win!

I went back and took another pass at the clouds. I like this much better, but have a long way to go. Thank you for the feedback!

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Since you're so new at this, maybe do some studies? I say this because you gotta get used to the programs you're using. Also because you're at a stage where literally any action will lead to improvement.
Doing studies can be a great way to explore different styles as well. Find some art you like and copy it.

I'm creating a book dummy for my portfolio! This month, I've decided to post my progress online in order to get this done more quickly. I look forward to hearing what you guys have to say about it in the coming months!
So the story is about a dog who gets invited to a party and gets overwhelmed by how many people there are (much like my actual dog...and like me 😋 ).
The cat is the party's host but is also the one who teaches the dog to take some time away from the party to recenter himself.

I'm finding that 1. I'm not that good at character design and 2. I struggle between what I think is a good drawing and what design actually serves the story.
For example, I envisioned the cat looking a lot like cat #1 and I would love to match him up with dog #1, but dog #1 doesn't look like the type to get overwhelmed at a party. Dog #2 looks more shy, but he doesn't contrast enough with cat #1. So I drew cat #3 to go with dog #2 BUT it isn't what I envisioned! You see my problem?

I'd love your input. Sooo yeah.

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