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WIP for picture book - critique request - thank you!
I am just starting to learn to be a picture book author/illustrator and I am pleased to find such a talented group here! I am looking forward to learn much from everyone.
I am working on an illustration for a picture book to submit to a mentorship opportunity, and may I ask for some advice?
The story is about an immigrated Asian family; the main character (age 7 or so) was initially going through a rough time adjusting to the new environment but eventually grew to like it. On this page, she is telling the reader about the beautiful flowers at the new home, but more importantly I am trying to convey that the family’s love makes the adjustments easier.
I am attaching here a pencil sketch and a rough color draft. I'd like advice on the following (and anything else that comes to your mind):
(1) composition <Do things look proportional? Does the left bottom corner look too empty? Does the dad look like he was pushing the girl's bike and just letting go?>
(2) Color - Do the colors allow the main characters to stand out? Are the colors of the houses too dull and should I use brighter colors to go with the mood of the scene?
THANK YOU SO MUCH! !!
RE: new piece - pls critique
@aska Hello! I am very new at illustration so I don't know enough to comment on the technique, but the characters are very cute! My only suggestion is they can be worked on to look more like those animals; a kiwi's beak is much more narrower; a sloth is more furry and it has long claws, and its face has a special pattern/color. I love what you are doing with the shadows and how they are breaking out from the paper! The paper effect looks very real!
RE: WIP for picture book - critique request - thank you!
@alissaempey Thank you so much! Yes that was a great tip; I will play around with the colors. Thanks!
RE: Please critique! Thank you so much!
@jason-bowen Thank you so much for taking the time to show me...it looks so much better! You're right; I don't really need the tulips as the dad-daughter relationship is what I want to focus on. And I don't know why I didn't think of pulling the text out of the picture. I was also trying to get some darker shades in the cherry blossom tree but couldn't figure out how. And I totally agree about the car! Really appreciate your time!