I think the one on the top right would work the best, you could maybe even zoom out a little more with it and make the looming shadow bigger
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Posts made by Gary Wilkinson
RE: WIP Worst fear
Thanks for all the critiques everyone, it's a big help. There are some great pieces of work this month and hopefully I can finish it on time, I'm trying to finish my Conner Mcgregor caricature before the fight so finding time is a bit hard :/
@tombarrettillo I like the torches on x too, if I can work them in without the scene been too busy i'll try to. I always have a hard time deciding on which I personally like best. I agree about the added tension in A with the small hole, i'll try and work that style into the final piece
@NoWayMe great advice with the light sources, I didn't notice about the guy not been in the center, he looks more to the right than the left to me though. It must be my eyes :)
@Jose-Ramos thanks for the paintover, I think that style works pretty well. I'm gonna have to steal the sparkly rays of water idea :P
@Katrina-Fowler I like your idea for #4, it would take a bit of a rework, but it's a great idea that I might use for the future, maybe have a few empty microwave trays scattered about the floor :P
@Tyson-Ranes thanks :) I'm trying to try work up an illustration portfolio. I mainly painted portraits/caricatures, so being part of the SVS forum has really helped teach me a lot about illustration :)
RE: Pirate WIP Critique welcome
Some idea's that came to mind were to have his boat partially sinking or to show some signs of wear and damage. I like rcartwright's idea about the barrel, I think it makes more sense than a mini boat (unless that is part of the story). You could also include a sinking ship in the background to help create more of a story to the piece.
His left arm is a little awkward in that position. It doesn't look as though he is rowing, rather than he is just using it to help the parrot. I think having the parrot on his head (as was mentioned) and having the bird holding the sail whilst he is frantically rowing away from sharks or something else dangerous, as they both are looking behind. You could even reverse the roles and have the parrot rowing instead whilst he is drink rum and relaxing, if you didn't want to include sharks :)
It might be hard to show, but it could be cool to have them a wooden leg as the oar instead of an actual oar.
RE: WIP a sweet worst fear
I like 2 and 4.
2 is a little confusing as to what the character is looking at some maybe some kind of cast shadow shape would better tell the story, or you could have the character away (either towards the viewer with something indicating danger/scary stuff in the background or away from the viewer using a dangerous shadow in the foreground).
4 could also be quite interesting if you put the character facing the viewer, but looking at something to their upper left or right with a what happened here expression.
RE: Help wih composition
@javier-algarra is the crow a major point of the story? its quite eye catching in it's current position. Also the branch seems to be pointing towards the church, whilst the fence is pointing towards the girl, so I can't decide on where my eyes want to go.
I think if you put the gravestone in the foreground like Stringfellow did then that would help somewhat. It also looks like you want to put quite a strong light facing the character, is she holdig a lamp? I would have her be more silhouetted using a backlight from the church
RE: WIP Worst fear
Thanks for all of your replies and feedback! I have tried some color studies with no.5 and a slightly different lighting on x, with the torches lighting up the tentacle. I'm leaning towards B, I like the 2 tone style of A, although I think the red is pushing towards a bit more of an adult theme :/
RE: WIP - Fear
@kat Aside from what was already mentioned about the values. I think adding a few standing up hairs on the dog would push the feeling of fear a bit more. I never had a dog, but whenever lightning struck the hairs on my cat would stand up and she would run under the bed or somewhere dark. The dog in this does look afraid, but i'm not sure whether it's waiting for the approaching storm or if it's reacting to the flash of lightning in the scene.
I think that some cloth draping over the box slightly would work quite nice and maybe some props around the dog, such as a soft toy next to it. I would also move the dog and the box a little more to the left lower the wall a bit more as the composition of the scene is a bit too evenly divided into 4 parts at the moment. If you lowered the wall (or made it into a metal fence) you could indicate some silhouetted rooftops in the background as well as other flashes of lightning.
RE: WIP Worst Fear 'thoughts'
I agree with Tess to push the exaggeration of the guy more. Perhaps you could have both arms quite straight pressing on the tub in an attempt to get him out of the water or even having one leg half out of the water (covering up his dedicates witha few well placed bubbles of course)
NoWayMe made a good point of making the shark bigger than the man, but it would be nice to see that he is still fitting in the tub properly. It could be interesting to add his tail behind the man kinda like a backrest so that he has nowhere to escape to. The gesture of the piece seems to form an almost C shape and I think it would be more exciting to push the size and curvature of the upper part of the C (with the shark being the upper and the guy been the lower)
Depending on the lighting you could even add a cast shadow of the shark onto the wall to push the presence of it a bit more and/or you could even expand the area of the tub where the shark is sitting with maybe the tub beginning to crack and water seeping out.
I would move the boat or do something more interesting with it as it is a little distracting. Maybe it could be in the shark's mouth or in a puddle on the floor which would flesh out the empty space in that area. It would also help to show how the water has been displaced in the bath (a shark would probably take up a decent amount of the space :P)