Hey Laurel, sorry it took so long to get back to you on this. I was looking over your composition again and I’m probably taking your darker tone too literally, like I think it won’t be so dramatic as a darker green for example compared to what you have going on in the lighter tones. It’s probably just the dark gray scale that threw me off. I was going to suggest maybe a more slender a tree but after thinking on that, you kind of need a bigger tree to balance out the left side.
Sorry I’m not very helpful on this, I’ll revisit if I️ can think of anything.
They’re all so cute! I like the third best because it’s family snuggle time, so the focus seems more on family bond than on each member’s focus decorating different parts of the tree or snowman. Even tho they’re looking at the book you’ve got the little one snuggling up to dad and one very in sync focus on the book page. Also like this one because it seems more candid, looking through the fort door into their space.
I agree more Christmas focus for the fort tho, liked the suggestion on red and green lights, cookies/milk, maybe a Christmas pattern somewhere, matching pjs or Santa hats, maybe just think about how you dec your own place and put something personal to your family like an heirloom ornament or something recognizable to family and friends who visit your home.
Ok So I changed the composition to feature more diagonal lines, showing the chaos, made one goose the main focus and grandma a second read, and changed her water gun to a gun that catapaults tiny yappy dogs( this came about when I got input from the family 😜)
Notes on add’l changes:
-move the mailbox(right bottom corner?)
replace cure t mailbox w Front end of a car
incorporate just a little more house on top
-apply rule of thirds to main goose so maybe crop right side or rework shot/sidewalk
-change the goose in the top right corner to be flying out to the right.
redistribute group of three goose on left so middle one is running off the page
show a dog hopping up onto grandma’s gun
Looking to get feedback on what does and doesn’t work.
Hey what's up guys! I would really appreciate some feedback on my artwork. Things I could improve upon,things that aren't working or maybe things you would have done differently. Thanks so much peace out and always remember to stay creative!
Hi, Everybody! Here's my final illustration. Here, I added texture to the hair by making some cross-hatching using adobe. I also added shadows on the character especially on her right arm to emphasize that it is under the hood/cape. I removed the cast shadow on her skirt to avoid confusion. That shadow wasn't created by her hand but by the bending of the fabric. then I changed the color of the basket to add contrast with the midground. I was going to change the color of the mushrooms but I decided not to. I like the piece as it already is. I hope you guys love it. Again, thank you for all your feedback. Thank you for helping me polish this piece. I'll be uploading it to my portfolio shortly. If you want to view it please click on this link https://nyrrylcadiz.wixsite.com/portfolio
This is shaping up nicely. I think the characters are fine where they are so long as you make sure the contrast and saturation on them make them the focal point if that's your goal. I agree with the above comment about the stairs. To me it looks like they need to be pushed back to line up with the entrance.
Lastly, I think adding something big and close on the lower left, and maybe even overlapping the machine some, would make the image even more dynamic as if we're peeking over random shop items or tools, like we are in the adventure with the kids and they were caught but we were not. Now I want to see what happens next!
I've recently started a blog and as I am not a professional and don't have any assignments, I am trying to look for different ideas to post about (BTW: my blog is about me learning to draw). So mainly I am trying to get ideas from what i do everyday. Recently I have posted sketches from family travel to Legoland in Denmark (https://mugaska.com/2017/11/08/lego-szal-w-danii/). At this moment i am working on a series of posts about my dog's friends. So first one is called Łapa, which in English means Paw. In a meantime, I have been painting fish for local fish shop .. but thats for another time ;-) I am experimenting with some loose, messy sketching and I am curious what you think about it.
Hi Tyler! Yes! I believe learning to give good feedback is about helping the artist to see what she/he didn't see, focus on things that were ignored and maybe even learn something that wasn't known. Giving feedback is a skill that also needs training!
And receiving feedback is the same: we need to train ourselves to filter it and see what is good in a feedback. And because we can't demand everyone to give feedback in the same way, we need to know when to just say "thanks" if the feedback is only praise, and to ignore the negative judgments.
And as with art in general, you improve these feedback skills by practicing and assessing. I like the forum for the chance to give feedback and assess how people react to it! And also for the chance to receive feedback!